Candy Arch

Position: Student
Name: Candy Arch
Age: 15
Gender: Female
Species: Vampire
House:

NPCs: Candy lives with a vampire mother and father, and she has a brother who is also a vampire. Non of them are realated.

Appearance:Candy has black hair down to her shoulders, slighly spickey. She had wide gold eyes. She is beautiful, even more than the usual vampire, so she catches the eyes of boys alot. Candy is skinny, and tall.
Personality: Candy is generally a sad girl. She doesnt have a boyfriend, but she had one named Kyle befor she was changed. Candy doesnt like to get close to people at school, because she knows it will hurt when they have to move again.

History: Candy was a very nice girl when she was human. She was very popular at school, and very liked. Her former boyfriend, Kyle, loved her very much. Candy lived in New York City.
Candy was a beautiful girl when she was human, even more so now that she is a vampire. Candy was changed in 1957 by a man named Bill, because he wanted her to be his mate. But, when Candy was a newborn, she escaped and ran away.
Then Candy found her new vampire mom and dad. They soon found Candys 'brother' lost in the forest, dieing. Candy changed him.

Rp Sample: I slowly walked to class. My thoughts drifted off to Kyle. I cant believe that I was changed. I know that Kyle loved me. I also knew that one day we were going to get married. Kyle promised me that. We never fought, so I believed him. But then I was changed, and my life shifted compleatly. I sighed.

Could you maybe make your history longer? And work on getting your RP posts longer, too?